Your second draft is very good work

Your second draft is very good work. I’m rather interesting and like your idea. In addition I think you have choose words appropriately. But I want to advice you , in the essay should mention the statistics of source tourist in many years. It’s structure to make your essay completely. In generally,when the more you practice to writing essay you will become.

Your second draft is very good work. I'm rather interesting and like your idea. In addition I think you have choose words appropriately. But I want to advice you, in the essay should mention the statistics of source tourist in many years. It's structure to make your essay completely. In generally, when the more you practice to writing essay you will become.

Your second draft is very good work. I 'm rather interesting and like your idea. In addition I think you have choose words. Appropriately. But I want to advice you in the, essay should mention the statistics of source tourist in many years. It s. ' Structure to make your essay completely. In generally when the, more you practice to writing essay you will become.
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